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This topic contains 2 replies, has 2 voices, and was last updated by Susan Carnes 10 years, 11 months ago.
This. Is. BEAUTIFUL.
The poetry is gorgeous as it is, and then lines like This state of the art dairy barn designed by Wisconsin architects was a model for the dairy state just make it even more delightful. WOW. I’m in love with the mood and pacing and phrasing. I can’t honestly think of anything to critique at the moment! I just enjoyed it so much as a reader that it took me out of myself (which is what good writing is supposed to do).
Ruthanne:
This is a chapter from my book The Way Back, and it is a mostly true story for I grew up with this barn and this man (and I still have the badge). I hoped the story was self contained enough for this exercise. It is hard to find time to write a new story for I am blogging all the time now at http://www.susancarnes.wordpress.com . I thank you for the Follow. When you post your story, I will read and comment of course. Also, your idea of magic really resonates with me. I looked at your profile after the “Follow”.
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