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Tagged: Billy Joel, dance, grief, loss, memories, moving on, Potter's Field, The River
This topic contains 4 replies, has 4 voices, and was last updated by Judith Shaw 10 years, 10 months ago.
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June 6, 2014 at 3:21 pm #3792
Hi Susan,
Thank you for sharing that with us. I especially liked this:
“…these songs take wings and fly right down inside-maybe all the way to that inner-child grieving in the night, and the soul is enfolded in wings feathered with forgiveness, and the dance begins, …”
Music is so very healing, and that comes across in your post.
I felt your emotions and liked the rawness of the way you shared them.
Thank you.
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June 6, 2014 at 5:55 pm #3794
Ah Margie:
You replied to one of my posts before and I am not sure I got back to you. Both times, you were kind and very insightful. Yes, music heals and I have so often gone there for guidance. Thanks for your remarks in all cases. Pointing out the run-on sentences I used in the earlier post was good feedback. I sometimes vary the length of these sentences-sort of like an art piece and especially if there is movement being described—but it doesn’t always work does it.
Thanks,
Sue
PS I am now going to your website for a look-see. We have several famous bead artists on this island and my girl friend makes glass beads herself. How fun and how exciting to forge glass, crochet or hang glass. Glass is fascinating!
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June 9, 2014 at 2:29 pm #3920
Thanks for sharing, Susan! The horse lover in me felt very sad after reading this. Loved the connection with Judas and hanging oneself with the halter.
It’s very poetic, for a blog post. I think readability (or maybe comprehension) would be helped with formatting. Paragraph breaks or italics or… something.
Lovely.
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June 17, 2014 at 12:10 pm #4209
Susan,
Here I am again, the course’s most IT challenged participant. Every time I tried to copy your blog details, I got knocked back by google. Could you send me a link? I’d really like to read it.
Judith
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