The Silver Screen

Hahaha! Very cute. 🙂 In spite of all good sense, I found myself rooting for Mitch – even though I also wanted to hit him. Good job!

I caught one typo: the toy gun slipped out [of] his hand and landed on the coarse carpet

And for the record, “Machismo Magazine” is hilarious. 😉

Ebony:
This was one of the most professional, captivating, entertaining funny pieces I have read in years. You had me from the first. Mitch is the protagonist, and you nailed his foibles right in the first paragraph. Of course Ruthanne rooted for him because a protagonist with a problem is compelling! Great.

Then, my guy here in this house wanted to know why I was laughing out loud-well because of your writing. You are talented!!!!!! The tiny details-like the sleeping computers covered with sticky notes-so right on!!! I loved how Natasha didn’t want Mitch near her at the party. Of course not. He was a spoiler. I loved the synopsis of the problem from Mitch’s point of view versus from Natalia’s point of view. You chose just the right modifiers as in: pillowy bosom. Ebony-you have a great grasp of relationship problems and a good sense of humor. Thanks!