The Unforgiven

Hey James!

My confusion with this short story is this: the old man he thinks he’s tailing is actually a woman with a gun? It’s dramatic, but could he slow down or speed up to get away from her if there is, indeed, miles of open highway ahead?

If it’s rush hour, probably there aren’t miles of open highway ahead.

There was a section where you used “vehicle” in close proximity. I noticed it, so I’m pointing it out, doesn’t mean it’s wrong.

Otherwise, I think we’ve all been there–agitation with other drivers, or being the target of someone else’s rage. And, probably, none of us have been confronted by a chick with a gun.

Your dialogue was realistic. The last line is haunting

Thanks for sharing!

You described the tension so well that I actually feel anxious after reading that – and I agree about the last line, very sobering words.

James,
I found it riveting. I felt the tension all throughout the piece, but the twist was unexpected. Nice job.