I was actually trying to make him sound a bit more like a bully, but I agree that it comes off weird. I’ve also made a small addition at the beginning to try and clarify the location a bit.
I’m sure there is more to this story, but it started as a flash.
Of course, all I can see are the errors and room for improvement. But I shipped it anyway.
Laura’s response to the story was “awesome!” She totally geeked over the space twist and asked a couple questions. Then she went on to suggest that with some edits, the story would be a great addition to a flash anthology our publishing house is pulling together for promotion.
Congrats on the recent release! That must feel amazing 🙂
I actually know what a doula is and know several who started in the profession. Like you, they weren’t fans of being on call all the time. Most moved into the childbirth education sector offering classes and workshops to expectant parents.
Glad you decided to join us and I look forward to reading your work.
