Hi Jeanne,

I look forward to hearing your stories and wonder if any of them will have a tropical taste.

Hi Katie,

Looking forward to reading your stories again. I’m planning on finishing the course this time. I know I’ll learn a lot.

Margie,
I enjoyed your story. Having lost a couple of friends by their own choosing the story resonated with me. I appreciated how you attempted to have an open conversation about it.

Loved the tone. I could hear the struggle. All in all it was good. I do think if you shortened it somewhat nothing would have been lost. At times, when we shorten pieces it causes them to be more powerful. Good job.

Hi Brian,

Good to meet you.

I loved the paraphrase you wrote, “you can recognize great writing by breaking down a complete piece into smaller parts and if the smaller parts can stand on their own, you know you’ve read something great.”

What a great thing to strive for.

Look forward to sharing the journey.

Katie,

Loved your piece. The tone, the wonderful descriptions tucked within the sentences.

The only thing I would change is what was already suggested, getting rid of weak words. Really nice.