I found your story on the fear of writing blog – I was taken aback when I read why you don’t want to use that trainer (won’t spoil it for others) – that would HURT! Great lessons from things that don’t turn out the way you expect. I encourage to share the link so more people can read what you’ve written.

You described the tension so well that I actually feel anxious after reading that – and I agree about the last line, very sobering words.

Judith – I found your story about writing at the coffee shop/losing your keys – what a day you had! Well done for making it triumphant and productive despite the insanity. Loved the line about not having Cheerios – matched the whole mood of the story.

I’m still trying to figure out why I’m writing – so my audience for now is just me. I’ve shared a few stories on Facebook in the past and people liked them and commented on them but there was no overarching theme to them, so I can’t really say that was an audience – they were just internet friends who read what I posted.

Really, really, really need to figure out why I’m here…

you really captured the relationship, their history, through their dialogue.

really cute story! loved that they don’t even have names but we understand them completely.

Loved this – I KNEW what you were going to do when I “saw” the bedroom light go out – Loved the “silent contract” you built between the neighbours.

One paragraph took me out of the story – the dog goes in the catflap and the next sentence talks about “she” – I had to re-read in order to figure out “who” the “she” was – at first I thought it was the dog.

lovely story. I could see the wall, the weeds, the rose bush and the bird bath, even the boys, LOL. Well done!

Wow… just wow…. chills went up my spine on so many levels – the story itself is amazing! The way your writing drew me in, great job! The ending, of course, is exactly right.

The first paragraph is a bit stilted or stiff or something – I think you were trying to condense your history into a few sentences but it felt a bit disconnected somehow (starting with where the church sits seemed abrupt – maybe it was the verb tense – sat – I had to read the first paragraph twice to try to figure out where you were going with it. You seemed to relax after a couple of sentences and then it was easy to “hear” your voice. Once you started telling your story it flowed better.

Great story!

I could “feel” and see the flying, like I was part of it – well done!

I took the word “couple” at the beginning of the story to indicate their relationship at that point, so when I read it I assumed they were partners/married.

very interesting world you’ve created. I’d be interested in reading more.

Your writing pulled me right into the story. Great job.

“His linen clothes bled sweat and contempt.”
perfect sentence – loved it!

and this one:
“With heavy arms she left the pantry and put on her best apron smile.” wonderful description

You really described the office “life”.

I loved the rhythm of this sentence: “One day, someday, maybe soon, I could get company e-mails or a name badge and access code all my own too.”

The paragraph that started with “She is tall and thin” = that kind of jarred me a bit, not sure if it was the change in tense or just the description, it took me out of the story for a moment (but I got right back into it).

Well done – can’t wait to read more.

I’m here to try to see if this writing thing is real or if I’ve been believing some kind of lie all my life.

I’ve known since I was small that I wanted to write. Last fall I finally (40+ years later) decided to start thinking about actually writing.

Now I’ve progressed to the point where I’m willing to admit in public that I want to do it.

So far, I haven’t started yet.

Is there a 12-step program for people like me?