I agree with all of your sentiments. While we wish we could just “write and give it to someone to promote it”, writing doesn’t work like that anymore. We have to market our work and believe in it… otherwise, there are seven skillion books out there that other can choose. We have to be able to tell others why they should choose ours!
I liked these a lot, but I’m a bit put off about the “so what”. Don’t get me wrong, they’re entertaining, but there should be a “so what” at the end of every story and I’m having trouble finding it here.
I am taking this course to get the “edge” to be a published writer. I am tired of people telling me that I am “almost” there. I know that a whole lot of thing go into that other than skill, but if skills are the only thing that are stopping me, I don’t want that to be an issue.
I also want to change lives with the way people see each other. So much of what I find myself writing are conversations that have changed people’s lives. If I can synthesize that for other to share, I’ve done my job as a writer.
My audience seems to be people who want to go on an adventure. So much of what I write people tell me is “weird” or “out there”, however they say it kept their interest. I wish to bring that to light in everything I write.
I am taking this course to get the “edge” to be a published writer. I am tired of people telling me that I am “almost” there. I know that a whole lot of thing go into that other than skill, but if skills are the only thing that are stopping me, I don’t want that to be an issue.
I love the way you described Bucky, “30 years old by now.” I laughed! And the conclusion was great. It really describes the way a kid thinks. I also love the way you describe it.
I’m a bit put off by the way it’s all written in present tense. It’s “correct”, don’t get me wrong. I just feel uncomfortable with that… perhaps it just me.
I really like the story. I could see the frustration of the main character. I also loved the tension created because “all of her friend are going to camp”. It’s very understandable.
Not really sure what the overall theme was though. I first thought it was kind of an economic thing (Not being able to afford it even though she has a passion. Try to be a bit more direct. You can always back off if it is too obvious.
I agree with the others. I could really get a sense of what is in his mind based on the condition of the house. I really love the description of the coffee shop. The ending made my heart sink a little. Good job.
One small critique is that I think you are a bit too descriptive. If you’re going for imagery, keep it up. But, with tone, try to only describe what is necessary and kill anything extra.
